Short Stories: The Last Report pts. I & II (by Dwayne Adams)

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When the future of 2015 is threatened by the death of president, John F. Kennedy, in the past, a time traveler sends their mind back in time, to warn the Order of Cronus, in 1963, three days before the assassination. Things go wrong when the time traveler ends up in the body of a drug addicted, schizophrenic. See what happens in the prequel series, to my upcoming novel.

Short Story: The Last Report pt. I
 

creedo299

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Nice writing style. In the same prose stead., reminds me, sort of of Another Roadside Attraction. That book was written with heart and some time to the era muse. The ending was sort of odd. Kennedy was never any-wheres near Jesus, but in the prosaic which would have been transferred to print, he did give of himself after the wreck of PT-109 in the pacific.
Kennedy just became an oddly placed progressive, based in politics in the 1960's.

The military with their aliens then, were like the boy who sold the family cow for a sack of magic beans and then tried to lie to cover it over and save face.

Not too bad there, governor. I hope that you branch out in the subject matter though to embrace more subject matter.In fiction you can sit back and criticize the flavor of the national scope and still not be raked over the coals for your personal views. (Fear and loathing in Las Vegas, was a post 60's diatribe on social political conventions then. Which through the eyes of a writer, commented on just how messed up events were. This was a substance addled view, that was not only funny, but refreshing as well. Good stuff, keep up the good work.

*In roadside attraction from memory; { As he sped down the forestry access road, him looking over to where she sat, noticed that while he more or less watched the road he was driving on. She on the other hand, reached deep into what the forest was and touched every tree with her mind }. Maybe not exactly as it was written, but pretty near darn close. Tom Robins in that book had the ability to paint with his words.
The goofy premise that they had the shroud of Christ and could get high off of this, was all the more spice into the beauty of that well written book."Good luck and I mean this sincerely"

Another Roadside Attraction: Tom Robbins: 9780553349481: Amazon.com: Books
 

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This is really good, you're very descriptive and are one of those writers who can paint a picture with words. The opening paragraph in particular:
It was a packed house at the Carousel Club. Drinks were flowing and the girls were captivating. The smoke in the air was so thick, they were like trapped clouds. Feathers fluttered and tassels were shaking, as the burlesque band beat out a horny version of Etta James’, Tough Lover.
The only criticism I have is the appearance of Marjorie Tildiend - That part made me stop and reread the first part because I thought I missed who that was supposed to be. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this :)
 
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Nice writing style. In the same prose stead., reminds me, sort of of Another Roadside Attraction. That book was written with heart and some time to the era muse. The ending was sort of odd. Kennedy was never any-wheres near Jesus, but in the prosaic which would have been transferred to print, he did give of himself after the wreck of PT-109 in the pacific.
Kennedy just became an oddly placed progressive, based in politics in the 1960's.

The military with their aliens then, were like the boy who sold the family cow for a sack of magic beans and then tried to lie to cover it over and save face.

Not too bad there, governor. I hope that you branch out in the subject matter though to embrace more subject matter.In fiction you can sit back and criticize the flavor of the national scope and still not be raked over the coals for your personal views. (Fear and loathing in Las Vegas, was a post 60's diatribe on social political conventions then. Which through the eyes of a writer, commented on just how messed up events were. This was a substance addled view, that was not only funny, but refreshing as well. Good stuff, keep up the good work.

*In roadside attraction from memory; { As he sped down the forestry access road, him looking over to where she sat, noticed that while he more or less watched the road he was driving on. She on the other hand, reached deep into what the forest was and touched every tree with her mind }. Maybe not exactly as it was written, but pretty near darn close. Tom Robins in that book had the ability to paint with his words.
The goofy premise that they had the shroud of Christ and could get high off of this, was all the more spice into the beauty of that well written book."Good luck and I mean this sincerely"

Another Roadside Attraction: Tom Robbins: 9780553349481: Amazon.com: Books
Thank you so very much for your feedback and well wishes, brother! I will check out Another Roadside attraction asap.
 
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This is really good, you're very descriptive and are one of those writers who can paint a picture with words. The opening paragraph in particular:


The only criticism I have is the appearance of Marjorie Tildiend - That part made me stop and reread the first part because I thought I missed who that was supposed to be. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this :)
Thanks for taking the time to read my story. Greatly appreciated. Majorie's role in all of this will be explained in the third part. Hope you will read that too. Take care!
 

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I met a neighbor that I shared my life story with and found out that he is a writer that printed out a hard copy of a book that is about to be published soon. "The Zeta Gray War: The Recruits by: D. F. Capps may be in your book store soon. I called David to ask him if he has seen the gray aliens himself after reading the story because it describes the grays perfectly. I was surprised to hear that he never saw one. Now I wonder just how many people have been face to face with a gray as I have? It would help to exchange info with others that have seen them.